November 18, 2004

Hanging on Tules

Mid-November fog--
Everything's muffled and drips.
Late lone cricket-song.

Posted by Pica at November 18, 2004 09:42 PM | TrackBack
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Nice. I keep reading that last line as "late Ione cricket song."

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Posted by: Chris Clarke at November 19, 2004 06:24 AM

beautiful image :)

second line maybe better as ...

"Everything, muffled, drips" (?)

does that better catch the stillness -- the long moment in time that the fog provides?

as you can see, i'm addicted to commas, especially when they help dispose of little words

lousy poet, but might have hope as an editor, or not, lemme know

peace, jarrett

Posted by: Jarrett at November 19, 2004 02:21 PM

Yeah, love it. Lucky to have a late lone cricket song! Here we just get the drips!

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